Blog Post #2
Emma Anderson
Melinda Schroeder
English 101
6 October 2016
Paradise
As I step
off the plane, I feel the humidity take over like a wet sticky film. The air is
thick with it and my skin immediately starts to plump like a marshmallow. I walk
off the tarmac and into a moderately cooler environment, but the humidity is no
less intense. When I reach for my passport I realize that if I do not hurry, I will
be run over by the rushing tourists with their little-used flip flops and disposable
cameras. This experience has not changed much from the original encounter, even
after fourteen trips. Change is not something that this place is known for. This
place manages to hold on to the old timeless ways of life. Only occasionally,
does the twentieth century rear its head to randomly appear, usually when I least
expect it. As I walk away from the inner chaos and swirl of bodies, I recognize
the familiar smells of a third world city welcoming me home. The mild smells of
sewer and fuel are overpowered by the tantalizing, basic smells of skewered
meat spiced with tarragon and chili. The smell of citrus fruit is everywhere
with a hint of cucumber and lime. Usually, it takes me less than five minutes
to find a fruit stand offering my favorite treat. There is nothing in this world
as delicious as a sweet ripe, dripping mango on a stick drenched in lime juice.
The mango becomes a cushion between me and the roaring engines and the honking
horns and the traffic whistles. This juicy bliss will carry me away from the
airport, down the highway and through the jungle to paradise.
I like how you used specifics in this without giving away the name, it made it so that I could see this place in my head but I wasn't just given a name, I was allowed to use my imagination a little. This place sounds really interesting, you blended all the smells and sounds really well. Also, the part about the tourists made me snicker! Which country is this place in? Do you have family or friends there that you stay with? It must be worth the trip if you've gone 14 times!
ReplyDeleteEmma, I enjoyed reading this. At first when you described the air being humid I immediately thought Hawaii, but as you described more and more about spices I realized you must be talking about a different country. It almost reminded me of Thailand or India. What country were you describing? You've pulled me in and now I'm curious.
ReplyDeleteI thought your description of this place was extremely detailed. You did an excellent job of using Show vs. Tell. You had my attention immediately when you described the humidity in this place. My guess is this place is Mexico.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the descriptive words you used, it helped me get a better picture of the smells and sights you were describing. You did a really good job with the show vs. tell it kept me interested.
ReplyDeletevery good details i was able to picture this place with all the different smells you described. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteGreat vivid details and description. I was engaged the entire piece, excited to read more. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI could immediately picture the place vividly. Your writing style is great!
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